my new flyer

[R1cho]

Yeah that makes sense :thumbs

Is it a CALLSURE or BT 0800 number

http://www.numbergroup.com/content/Home.html

 

[Adz]

http://www.numbergroup.com/content/Home.html

:thumbs

 

[lacroupade]

i think its better to have the price there, that way people know what it costs, saves them phoneing my 0800 number costing me money just for them to say no lol

n..e..a..r..l..y.. there :lol You can keep on ad infinitum, but this is a window to your business, so its worth getting right.

You've still got a bit of repetition in there ("our prices") so I've rehashed the words a bit....I don't think you can have too many so if you need to slightly resize the pics, hey-ho. Hope they are of use. Oh and make sure you bold or italic the URL and phone numbers OK?

Finally, and this is just personal preference, thought about applying an infra-red effect to the church piccy?

PS - if anyone moans about the 'Because' at the start of a sentence, journalistic licence applies to marketing copy OK?! :lol

Heres the words (and i WOULD make it two paras, easier on the eye):

We are a traditional, family-run business, specialising in portraiture and weddings. We work from our bespoke studio or at your own home or location, producing formal or informal photography to suit your requirements. Because we know how important these fleeting memories are, we use only the best equipment and printing techniques to deliver perfect photographs every time.

Our prices reflect the fact that premium quality work doesn't need to command premium prices; packages start from just £40 for a portrait session at our studio or only £50 in your home. Please visit our website www.pbsphotography.co.uk for more details and to see some of our work, or feel free to call for an informal chat on 0800 310 1082 or 07920 011941.

 

[R1cho]

i need a holiday :lol

 

[clivvy]

I think Lacroupades advice is bloody brilliant mate, coming along nicely.

 

[lacroupade]

i need a holiday :lol

well you got to earn the money to pay for it mate, so get on with it LOL:lol

But seriously.....this will be the only thing people see of your business.....get the bloody thing right, doesn't matter how long it takes. And that includes punctuation, spelling, layout and all sorts...... I think its there with the above changes personally, but thats just me. Id spend the £40 on a session if it were me. GOOD LUCK

 

[Sedger]

Hiya - here's my contribution

• Massively improved from the first draft thanx to comments from others.
• Don't use more than one font or family if fonts.
• Don't use the word "bespoke" - not really needed.

Flyers need to be designed to suit the circumstances and purpose.

If this is a casual flyer to attract business - the sort you'll leave in wedding venues - there's probably too much text. You need to demonstrate flair and vision - to get that initial "bloody hell they look good" reaction. So I'd say less text and more flair.

If its a brochure to explain prices etc then that's another issue. Probably not enuff room if you keep all of the pictures.

How's your web site? Needs to continue the look and feel of the flyer.

Hope this is helpful. Sent in the spirit of support.

 

[R1cho]

I would just like to say a big thankyou to everyone for their help and advice on this, especially to lacroupade who seems to know an awful lot about this type of thing :bow, it looks and reads so much better now :clap :thumb2

 

[lacroupade]

• Massively improved from the first draft thanx to comments from others.
• Don't use more than one font or family if fonts.
• Don't use the word "bespoke" - not really needed.

Flyers need to be designed to suit the circumstances and purpose.

If this is a casual flyer to attract business - the sort you'll leave in wedding venues - there's probably too much text. You need to demonstrate flair and vision - to get that initial "bloody hell they look good" reaction. So I'd say less text and more flair.

If its a brochure to explain prices etc then that's another issue. Probably not enuff room if you keep all of the pictures.

How's your web site? Needs to continue the look and feel of the flyer.

Hope this is helpful. Sent in the spirit of support.

I know where you're coming from but in this case I'm going to disagree.

I've assumed this flyer is a 'catch-all' or should be so it needs those words.

If we were talking 'wow' photography (and no offence intended Ricoh!!) I'd agree, the work would tell the story but in the nicest way this is good, competent work but not 'wow'.

 

[R1cho]

• Don't use the word "bespoke" - not really needed.

I was thinking of changing that to HOME BASED being as my studio is a converted garage lol

 

[lacroupade]

I was thinking of changing that to HOME BASED being as my studio is a converted garage lol

Ah.

Facts do have a tendency to get in the way don't they LMAO!:thumb2

But hey, a studio is a studio, don't knock it. Let the punters decide cos once they are there the jobs nearly done isn't it. Don't be putting them off before you start!

 

[R1cho]

I know where you're coming from but in this case I'm going to disagree.

I've assumed this flyer is a 'catch-all' or should be so it needs those words.

If we were talking 'wow' photography (and no offence intended Ricoh!!) I'd agree, the work would tell the story but in the nicest way this is good, competent work but not 'wow'.

no offence taken, i only really do portrait and wedding work, cant really capture much wow with that unless the person in front of the camera wants to do a bit of work aswell, and with portraits they mainly just stand still with that fixed smile :doh and weddings they just want to get the ceremony over with then go get pi$$ed lol

 

[lacroupade]

no offence taken, i only really do portrait and wedding work, cant really capture much wow with that unless the person in front of the camera wants to do a bit of work aswell, and with portraits they mainly just stand still with that fixed smile :doh and weddings they just want to get the ceremony over with then go get pi$$ed lol

exactly but its about playing to your strengths isn't it.

What was the purpose of this flyer? Is it general or just for dropping at weddings?

Worth leafleting a few streets and seeing what happens.

 

[R1cho]

Worth leafleting a few streets and seeing what happens.

Thats what the flyer is mainly for, also have been given permission to leave some in a few churches and the registry office

 

[BigBlack]

Sorry to butt in late, but I would either 'centre' or 'justify' your text at the top! just to give it a bit more symmetrical look

:thumb2

 

[R1cho]

 

[lacroupade]

I'd buy that :thumb2

Print the little ba5tard before you get any more changes.:lol

Did you dump the infra-red idea? Just thought it supported the digital manipulation offering...

 

[R1cho]

I'd buy that :thumb2

Print the little ba5tard before you get any more changes.:lol

Did you dump the infra-red idea? Just thought it supported the digital manipulation offering...

I thought the flowers showed that idea aswell as the weddings

 

[Adz]

Save & start printing !

By joe you've got it :clap :thumbs

 

[lacroupade]

I thought the flowers showed that idea aswell as the weddings

true..its your flyer but well done, looking good.:thumb2