my new flyer

[R1cho]

well i spent some time lastnight designing a new flyer for my business, i was wondring if the kind folk on here would give me some feedback on it, good ot bad.

 

[lacroupade]

Typos as well?

 

[R1cho]

Typos as well?

yea lol

 

[makeitfit]

The bird with the roses looks to be in a state of arousal as she has a bit of a fondle :naughty

 

[R1cho]

The bird with the roses looks to be in a state of arousal as she has a bit of a fondle :naughty

behave thats my sister lol

 

[lacroupade]

Initial response.

1. No 'e' in Portraits.

2. Use 'Architectural' instead of 'Buildings'

3. Centralise all the text in the bottom voucher section.

4. Not sure about the use of B&W/Sepia.....I'd have done the wedding flowers in a pastel-type colour and the bride in colour as well with maybe soft focus or something.

5. Really not sure about the 'Damien' kid with the beady blue eyes.....I see what you were doing but have you got something else you can do in B&W with colour isolated...? Maybe the flowers in the bride picture (leaving her in B&W)?

6. Font for your web/email is a bit dull?

Hope that helps....sorry it sounds a it harsh though!

 

[(RIP) PLANK]

I think it looks a bit 'busy' maybe less fonts? :nenau

but always read my disclaimer before acting upon my advice :thumb2

 

[R1cho]

Really not sure about the 'Damien' kid with the beady blue eyes

thats my son lol, valid points though didn't even notice the typo lol that'll teach me to do stuff after a few strong shandys lol

 

[lacroupade]

Also use a family pet instead of a tigger?

And shadow on central wording is unnatural as it is, looks better dropped lower left or right....

and take a step back....what is it about that flyer that would make someone think "yeah, I'll use him instead of the dozens of others in Yellow Pages..."?

It doesn't say you're experienced, professional, stay for the whole event if necessary, highly competitive, high quality equipment etc..etc.. you see my point? You need a USP.

 

[makeitfit]

I now know she's your sister but a shot of her with eye's open would be good:augie
I've got loads of pics of the wife with her eyes closed but she wouldn't thank me to put them on a flyer :lol
No Luvgluv, stop it now, she was NOT in readers wives :wasntme

 

[lacroupade]

I now know she's your sister but a shot of her with eye's open would be good:augie
I've got loads of pics of the wife with her eyes closed but she wouldn't thank me to put them on a flyer :lol
No Luvgluv, stop it now, she was NOT in readers wives :wasntme

My mind is always on higher moral ground my son, not festering in the sewer.

Just send the URL...:naughty

 

[clivvy]

I agree with points made, looks good, but id reduce the different types on font used, stick to one, or two max. :thumb2

 

[R1cho]

any better?

 

[4x4_Gav]

Right then R1cho - I get married next February and will need a photographer for the night only (around 4 hours).

Would you consider club discounts

The venue is The Red Brick house near Edwinstowe.

 

[makeitfit]

any better?

It's getting there, here's my few points:
Pets sounds better than "Animals":sly
PBS IS a prof (not are)
No capital F in family.
Specialising in Potraits and Weddings. delete "photography" again in the same sentence.
Full stop after wedding.
Dump the http://
Keep at it
Might be worth a local tel no. too for those that "dont do" 0800

 

[R1cho]

gettin there lol

 

[Deleted account DD]

I reckon too much text squeezed in, I can see where youre coming from but punters wont be interested in it :nenau

How about something like:


"PBS is a traditional family ran business using only the very best equipment and materials to produce the very best photographs for you.
Our prices reflect the fact that premium quality work quality does not need to have a premium price tag.
Our costs start at £40 for a portrait session at our studio or £xxx in your own home for your convenience.
Please see our website xxxxxxxxxxxxx for full details and pricing structure or phone for a chat on 0800xxxxxxxxxx or xxxxxxxxmobilexxxxxxxxx"

:nenau

 

[briggie]

to be honest mate i lost interest once i saw all the text , perhaps a better idea is to put all the info on the rear of the flyer and concentrate on a attention grabbing front ..... just my humble opinion , not a criticism , my beloved sheila works for a large newspaper /advertising group

 

[R1cho]

I reckon too much text squeezed in, I can see where youre coming from but punters wont be interested in it :nenau

How about something like:


"PBS is a traditional family ran business using only the very best equipment and materials to produce the very best photographs for you.
Our prices reflect the fact that premium quality work quality does not need to have a premium price tag.
Our costs start at £40 for a portrait session at our studio or £xxx in your own home for your convenience.
Please see our website xxxxxxxxxxxxx for full details and pricing structure or phone for a chat on 0800xxxxxxxxxx or xxxxxxxxmobilexxxxxxxxx"

:nenau

i like that i might nick it lol :augie

 

[Deleted account DD]

i like that i might nick it lol :augie

help yourself, not claiming its even good but if you format it say centre under the larger heading it gives an intro with out waffling ( i hope :lol )

Good luck anyway :thumb2