my new flyer

R1cho · 03-02-2011, 16:46

well i spent some time lastnight designing a new flyer for my business, i was wondring if the kind folk on here would give me some feedback on it, good ot bad.

lacroupade · 03-02-2011, 16:49

Typos as well?

R1cho · 03-02-2011, 16:49

Quote:

Originally Posted by lacroupade

Typos as well?

yea lol

makeitfit · 03-02-2011, 16:49

The bird with the roses looks to be in a state of arousal as she has a bit of a fondle

R1cho · 03-02-2011, 16:50

Quote:

Originally Posted by makeitfit

The bird with the roses looks to be in a state of arousal as she has a bit of a fondle

behave thats my sister lol

lacroupade · 03-02-2011, 16:54

Initial response.

1. No 'e' in Portraits.

2. Use 'Architectural' instead of 'Buildings'

3. Centralise all the text in the bottom voucher section.

4. Not sure about the use of B&W/Sepia.....I'd have done the wedding flowers in a pastel-type colour and the bride in colour as well with maybe soft focus or something.

5. Really not sure about the 'Damien' kid with the beady blue eyes.....I see what you were doing but have you got something else you can do in B&W with colour isolated...? Maybe the flowers in the bride picture (leaving her in B&W)?

6. Font for your web/email is a bit dull?

Hope that helps....sorry it sounds a it harsh though!

(RIP) PLANK · 03-02-2011, 16:56

I think it looks a bit 'busy' maybe less fonts?

but always read my disclaimer before acting upon my advice

R1cho · 03-02-2011, 16:57

Quote:

Originally Posted by lacroupade

Really not sure about the 'Damien' kid with the beady blue eyes

thats my son lol, valid points though didn't even notice the typo lol that'll teach me to do stuff after a few strong shandys lol

lacroupade · 03-02-2011, 16:58

Also use a family pet instead of a tigger?

And shadow on central wording is unnatural as it is, looks better dropped lower left or right....

and take a step back....what is it about that flyer that would make someone think "yeah, I'll use him instead of the dozens of others in Yellow Pages..."?

It doesn't say you're experienced, professional, stay for the whole event if necessary, highly competitive, high quality equipment etc..etc.. you see my point? You need a USP.

makeitfit · 03-02-2011, 17:06

I now know she's your sister but a shot of her with eye's open would be good

I've got loads of pics of the wife with her eyes closed but she wouldn't thank me to put them on a flyer

No Luvgluv, stop it now, she was NOT in readers wives

lacroupade · 03-02-2011, 17:45

Quote:

Originally Posted by makeitfit

I now know she's your sister but a shot of her with eye's open would be good

I've got loads of pics of the wife with her eyes closed but she wouldn't thank me to put them on a flyer

No Luvgluv, stop it now, she was NOT in readers wives

My mind is always on higher moral ground my son, not festering in the sewer.

Just send the URL...

clivvy · 03-02-2011, 17:51

I agree with points made, looks good, but id reduce the different types on font used, stick to one, or two max.

R1cho · 03-02-2011, 19:56

any better?

4x4_Gav · 03-02-2011, 20:15

Right then R1cho - I get married next February and will need a photographer for the night only (around 4 hours).

Would you consider club discounts

The venue is The Red Brick house near Edwinstowe.

makeitfit · 03-02-2011, 20:18

Quote:

Originally Posted by R1cho

any better?

It's getting there, here's my few points:
Pets sounds better than "Animals"

PBS IS a prof (not are)
No capital F in family.
Specialising in Potraits and Weddings. delete "photography" again in the same sentence.
Full stop after wedding.
Dump the http://
Keep at it

Might be worth a local tel no. too for those that "dont do" 0800

03-02-2011, 16:46	#1
R1cho Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2010 Location: Wales Vehicle: 1997 LandCruiser Colorado Posts: 4,201	my new flyer well i spent some time lastnight designing a new flyer for my business, i was wondring if the kind folk on here would give me some feedback on it, good ot bad.

03-02-2011, 16:49	#2
lacroupade Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2009 Location: All hail to the Glove of Love... Posts: 9,212	Typos as well?

03-02-2011, 16:49	#4
makeitfit Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: on the beach WEST WALES Vehicle: Maverick TDi BLACK mmm Posts: 15,136	The bird with the roses looks to be in a state of arousal as she has a bit of a fondle

03-02-2011, 16:54	#6
lacroupade Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2009 Location: All hail to the Glove of Love... Posts: 9,212	Initial response. 1. No 'e' in Portraits. 2. Use 'Architectural' instead of 'Buildings' 3. Centralise all the text in the bottom voucher section. 4. Not sure about the use of B&W/Sepia.....I'd have done the wedding flowers in a pastel-type colour and the bride in colour as well with maybe soft focus or something. 5. Really not sure about the 'Damien' kid with the beady blue eyes.....I see what you were doing but have you got something else you can do in B&W with colour isolated...? Maybe the flowers in the bride picture (leaving her in B&W)? 6. Font for your web/email is a bit dull? Hope that helps....sorry it sounds a it harsh though!

03-02-2011, 16:56	#7
(RIP) PLANK Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: Central England, in the Heart of the Black Country Vehicle: T2 2004 TDI SE LWB Posts: 7,740	I think it looks a bit 'busy' maybe less fonts? but always read my disclaimer before acting upon my advice

03-02-2011, 16:58	#9
lacroupade Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2009 Location: All hail to the Glove of Love... Posts: 9,212	Also use a family pet instead of a tigger? And shadow on central wording is unnatural as it is, looks better dropped lower left or right.... and take a step back....what is it about that flyer that would make someone think "yeah, I'll use him instead of the dozens of others in Yellow Pages..."? It doesn't say you're experienced, professional, stay for the whole event if necessary, highly competitive, high quality equipment etc..etc.. you see my point? You need a USP.

03-02-2011, 17:06	#10
makeitfit Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: on the beach WEST WALES Vehicle: Maverick TDi BLACK mmm Posts: 15,136	I now know she's your sister but a shot of her with eye's open would be good I've got loads of pics of the wife with her eyes closed but she wouldn't thank me to put them on a flyer No Luvgluv, stop it now, she was NOT in readers wives

03-02-2011, 17:51	#12
clivvy Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2009 Location: Huddersfield Vehicle: Terrano 03 LWB Posts: 6,947	I agree with points made, looks good, but id reduce the different types on font used, stick to one, or two max.

03-02-2011, 19:56	#13
R1cho Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2010 Location: Wales Vehicle: 1997 LandCruiser Colorado Posts: 4,201	any better?

03-02-2011, 20:15	#14
4x4_Gav Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2010 Location: Nottinghamshire Vehicle: Nissan Terrano II 2.7 TDI Posts: 480	Right then R1cho - I get married next February and will need a photographer for the night only (around 4 hours). Would you consider club discounts The venue is The Red Brick house near Edwinstowe.