my new flyer

[R1cho]

Originally Posted by makeitfit

The bottom left pic needs some crows flying about

or maybe this lol

[makeitfit]

Originally Posted by R1cho

or maybe this lol

Nice
Print it

[R1cho]

Originally Posted by makeitfit

Nice
Print it

might look a tad unprofessional

[lacroupade]

Originally Posted by makeitfit

Nice
Print it

Not yet!

1. Its 'family run' not 'family ran'.

2. First sentence you've said 'very best' twice. Suggest you say something like 'to produce perfect photographs every time'?

In my past life I used to produce proposal documents for deals worth ten of millions and I learned very quickly that you can write extremely competent documents that get ignored because they are poorly spelt or presented. Conversely, the biggest load of bullsh1t looks good when properly spelt and formatted.

So time and trouble at this stage will always pay dividends.

PS what about some kind of guarantee? If they are unhappy you either refund or shoot again? But of course they get no prints until they approve proofs....?

[makeitfit]

I meant print the bat not the flyer

[R1cho]

better?

[Adz]

Looks good but can or should you leave the prices out

[briggie]

wheres the porno pics ?

[R1cho]

Originally Posted by Adz

Looks good but can or should you leave the prices out

i think its better to have the price there, that way people know what it costs, saves them phoneing my 0800 number costing me money just for them to say no lol

[Adz]

Originally Posted by R1cho

i think its better to have the price there, that way people know what it costs, saves them phoneing my 0800 number costing me money just for them to say no lol

Yeah that makes sense

Is it a CALLSURE or BT 0800 number

[R1cho]

Originally Posted by Adz

Yeah that makes sense

Is it a CALLSURE or BT 0800 number

http://www.numbergroup.com/content/Home.html

[Adz]

Originally Posted by R1cho

http://www.numbergroup.com/content/Home.html

[lacroupade]

Originally Posted by R1cho

i think its better to have the price there, that way people know what it costs, saves them phoneing my 0800 number costing me money just for them to say no lol

n..e..a..r..l..y.. there You can keep on ad infinitum, but this is a window to your business, so its worth getting right.

You've still got a bit of repetition in there ("our prices") so I've rehashed the words a bit....I don't think you can have too many so if you need to slightly resize the pics, hey-ho. Hope they are of use. Oh and make sure you bold or italic the URL and phone numbers OK?

Finally, and this is just personal preference, thought about applying an infra-red effect to the church piccy?

PS - if anyone moans about the 'Because' at the start of a sentence, journalistic licence applies to marketing copy OK?!

Heres the words (and i WOULD make it two paras, easier on the eye):

We are a traditional, family-run business, specialising in portraiture and weddings. We work from our bespoke studio or at your own home or location, producing formal or informal photography to suit your requirements. Because we know how important these fleeting memories are, we use only the best equipment and printing techniques to deliver perfect photographs every time.

Our prices reflect the fact that premium quality work doesn't need to command premium prices; packages start from just £40 for a portrait session at our studio or only £50 in your home. Please visit our website www.pbsphotography.co.uk for more details and to see some of our work, or feel free to call for an informal chat on 0800 310 1082 or 07920 011941.

[R1cho]

i need a holiday

[clivvy]

I think Lacroupades advice is bloody brilliant mate, coming along nicely.